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[[Terry McQuinn]] is up. [[User:ClanWolverine101|ClanWolverine101]] 20:19, 29 March 2012 (PDT) [[Terry McQuinn]] is up. [[User:ClanWolverine101|ClanWolverine101]] 20:19, 29 March 2012 (PDT)
− :I made the following changes, with the included explanations:
− * Changed born and died to b. and d. respectively. There's no policy on this, but on the best-written WP articles seem to do it that way
− * Moved the first cite out of the sentence. Since all of that info comes from the same source, there's no need to call out a specific portion of the sentence.
− * Quotes around the source section (""Combatants: Thirty-first Division")
− * I approve of the non-supported comments about lack of info on his early life. I've always been the one to list "just the facts", but I've also worked from the impression we're in-character historians and -in that case- it's perfectly reasonable we'd comment upon what we don't know.
− * Changed 'again' to 'more', since the word (and context) appeared in the previous sentence.
− Great article, especially with so little to work with. As you can see, just cosmetic changes. Your're writing skills are in no doubt.--[[User:Revanche|Revanche]] <sup>([[User_talk:Revanche|talk]]|[[Special:Contributions/Revanche|contribs]])</sup> 12:52, 15 April 2012 (PDT)
== 10th Lyran Guards == == 10th Lyran Guards ==
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